Finished short story

Wizard World in NYC

It was a normal day in Wizardwarts when it was finally time for Tristan to choose if to stay in the Wizard World or go live in Earth. He knew this decision was going to change his life completely and that he had to choose carefully. Every wizard had a purpose and Tristan was deciding if he was going to protect humans or have a normal job in the Wizard World. He talked to his family and friends about it, then, he finally decided he was going to move to earth and start a new life there. In order go to earth they had to enter a capsule with other wizards that decided to go to Earth. They would land anywhere on Earth and as of now nobody knew exactly where they would land.

It was almost time to leave for earth and Tristan was saying his goodbyes to his family. When he got on the look alike meteor spaceship he only knew one other person on the plane which was Kim. Kim was a fellow graduate from school which Tristan knew since they were kids.

“Oh, Kim, I did not know you were coming to earth also,” said Tristan.

“Yeah, it’s gonna be a long trip but I am surely going to enjoy it,” Kim replied.

“Well, yeah I guess?” said Tristan confused. What Tristan actually did not know was that Kim had a crush on him since they were little. This reason Kim was actually going to earth for was because she had a big crush on Tristan. When they got to earth they landed in New York but the meteor was visible for humans. When they got there they immediately knew what to do because of the order their superiors gave them. They all went to their new home and Tristan and Kim were new apartment neighbors. When they both finally adapt they have to start to find out what dangers from the wizard world humans are exposed to.

They started their research and started by looking at news and also if there was any activity from the wizard world that indicated there was any danger in New York City. After a while, they actually found out there were monsters from their world who had been causing trouble in the city. They tried locating them and easily found them in a storage that was downtown. Their duty was to protect the humans in the area and that none of them found out who they really were. They came up with a plan because they had no idea what they were trying to do. They went to the storage together and stayed hours outside over hearing what their plan was. They knew that they were not easy to stop because they were powerful and experienced monsters. They could convert themselves into a human form and easily manipulate humans with their powers. The creatures names were Ragnarok and Jackwick. They were planning to form a generator with the energy of their powers strong enough to destroy New York City.

When both Tristan and Kim went home to make a plan of how to take care of this, there was a knock on the door. The person on the door was another wizard and his name was Lucifer. He had come to Earth for other purposes but he hated Tristan since he was a kid. At this point, they were both enemies.

“Good evening,” said Lucifer entering the apartment.

“What do you want Lucifer?” asked Tristan.

“I’m just here to say one thing. We are still enemies after all Tristan,” said Lucifer walking out the door.

“Well, let’s keep it that way and get out of here,” said Tristan closing the door behind him. He wondered for days what he really meant with that when he finally found out. Lucifer had told the monsters that Tristan was out there to capture them and now they were trying to kill Tristan.

Days and days passed when Tristan was finally tired and went to confront the two monsters. He looked for them all over the city because they were not in the storage anymore. When he found them they were using their powers to hurt humans and destroy anything in their way. Tristan had enough of this and started casting spells to try and stop them from doing any more damage. They were too powerful for him. He kept fighting them when Kim suddenly arrived and started fighting them. They just could not find a way to beat them until they cast a spell to make them appear somewhere else which only solved the problem for a limited amount of time. After all of this they saw that around them was a crowd of humans who had seen this. Fortunately, they had a spell which worked on humans to make them forget anything.

Tristan and Kim were at the apartments with only a few hours left to try and find a way to defeat the monsters. Suddenly, they both came up with an idea which would be really difficult for them to perform but it was their only option. They had to perform a spell which would send them all the way back to the Wizard World and they thought they were ready so they tried it. They located both monsters and were ready for their second encounter. When they started fighting they tried to resist all the power until it happened. Tristan had just cast the spell to get some of the most dangerous monsters back to the Wizard World. They had just completed one of the most difficult tasks they would ever have to do. Tristan and Kim started celebrating and got caught up in the moment and kissed each other. Tristan decided he was going to go back to the Wizard World for a while and come back to be with Kim.

When Tristan came back he was happy for his new relationship and life. He had decided that he was going protect humans as always but have a normal human life as well. He started to meet humans and got a job where he could socialize with humans. He made sure no one ever found out about his secret and lived his life with enjoyment. He made actual friends and made human activities with them but he never told anyone about his secret on Earth but Kim who was a fellow wizard.

  • Added one more line of dialogue
  • Put some commas that were missing
  • Added one sentence at the beginning so that the context at the beginning of the story made more sense

Wizard World in NYC

Wizard World in NYC

It was a normal day in Wizardwarts when it was finally time for Tristan to choose if to stay in the Wizard World or go live in Earth. He knew this decision was going to change his life completely and that he had to choose carefully. He talked to his family and friends about it when he finally decided he was going to move to earth and start a new life there. In order go to earth they had to enter a capsule with other wizards that decided to go to Earth. They would land anywhere on Earth and as of now nobody knew exactly where they would land.

It was almost time to leave for earth and Tristan was saying his goodbyes to his family. When he got on the look alike meteor spaceship he only knew one other person on the plane which was Kim. Kim was a fellow graduate from school which Tristan knew since they were kids.

“Oh, Kim, I did not know you were coming to earth also,” said Tristan.

“Yeah, it’s gonna be a long trip but I am surely going to enjoy it,” Kim replied.

“Well, yeah I guess?” said Tristan confused. What Tristan actually did not know was that Kim had a crush on him since they were little. This reason Kim was actually going to earth for was because she had a big crush on Tristan. When they got to earth they landed in New York but the meteor was visible for humans. When they got there they immediately knew what to do because of the order their superiors gave them. They all went to their new home and Tristan and Kim were new apartment neighbors. When they both finally adapt they have to start to find out what dangers from the wizard world humans are exposed to.

They started their research and started by looking at news and also if there was any activity from the wizard world that indicated there was any danger in New York City. After a while, they actually found out there were monsters from their world who had been causing trouble in the city. They tried locating them and easily found them in a storage that was downtown. Their duty was to protect the humans in the area and that none of them found out who they really were. They came up with a plan because they had no idea what they were trying to do. They went to the storage together and stayed hours outside over hearing what their plan was. They knew that they were not easy to stop because they were powerful and experienced monsters. They could convert themselves into a human form and easily manipulate humans with their powers. The creatures names were Ragnarok and Jackwick. They were planning to form a generator with the energy of their powers strong enough to destroy New York City.

When both Tristan and Kim went home to make a plan of how to take care of this there was a knock on the door. The person on the door was another wizard and his name was Lucifer. He had come to Earth for other purposes but he hated Tristan since he was a kid. At this point, they were both enemies.

“Good evening,” said Lucifer entering the apartment.

“What do you want Lucifer?” asked Tristan.

“I’m just here to say one thing. We are still enemies after all Tristan,” said Lucifer walking out the door. He wondered for days what he really meant with that when he finally found out. Lucifer had told the monsters that Tristan was out there to capture them and now they were trying to kill Tristan.

Days and days passed when Tristan was finally tired and went to confront the two monsters. He looked for them all over the city because they were not in the storage anymore. When he found them they were using their powers to hurt humans and destroy anything in their way. Tristan had enough of this and started casting spells trying to stop them from doing any more damage. They were too powerful for him. He kept fighting them when Kim suddenly arrived and started fighting them. They just could not find a way to beat them until they cast a spell to make them appear somewhere else which only solved the problem for a limited amount of time. After all of this they saw that around them was a crowd of humans who had seen this. Fortunately, they had a spell which worked on humans to make them forget anything.

Tristan and Kim were at the apartments with only a few hours left to try and find a way to defeat the monsters. Suddenly, they both came up with an idea which would be really difficult for them to perform but it was their only option. They had to perform a spell which would send them all the way back to the Wizard World and they thought they were ready so they tried it. They located both monsters and were ready for their second encounter. When they started fighting they tried to resist all the power until it happened. Tristan had just cast the spell to get some of the most dangerous monsters back to the Wizard World. They had just completed one of the most difficult tasks they would ever have to do. Tristan and Kim started celebrating and got caught up in the moment and kissed each other. Tristan decided he was going to go back to the Wizard World for a while and come back to be with Kim.

When Tristan came back he was happy for his new relationship and life. He had decided that he was going protect humans as always but have a normal human life as well. He started to meet humans and got a job where he could socialize with humans. He made sure no one ever found out about his secret and lived his life with enjoyment. He made actual friends and made human activities with them but he never told anyone about his secret on Earth but Kim who was a fellow wizard.

Steps

1- Tristan is in Wizardwarts training for his life after school. He is in the stage about to decide if to stay in the wizard world or go into the human world. If he goes to the human world he has to protect them from dangers that involve wizards.

2- He wants to go to the human world. He is tired of his world and wants something new and he also wants to confront danger against wizard world monsters.

3-Tristan goes to NYC and starts his journey as a protector wizard.

4- He adapts to NYC and it’s people and starts his own “human” life. He follows his wizard superior orders to act as a human and to start figuring out what wizard problems there are in NYC and destroy those problems.

5- He finds out that Lucifer and his assistant monster are currently in NYC. He learns that they are trying to destroy NYC and take over it and when they find out he is there they want to kill him.

6- His identity is discovered by some humans and he has to find a way that they don’t spread the word.

7- Destroy those monsters and go back to his normal life between the wizard world and earth. Go back to his normal life protecting the earth but against other dangers and going back to the wizard world once in a while to live his wizard life where’s it began.

8- Goes to NYC and convinces his wizard superior to actually be real friends with some humans and adapt to them.

Story Structure

1.My main Character is Tristan.

2.Tristan wants to protect the world specifically NYC f from the Wizard world and its dangers.

3.The conflict is that Lucifer (monster) is trying to destroy NYC and kill Tristan to destroy and do anything he wants.

4. Yes he does protect NYC from the monsters and takes Lucifer back to the Wizard world.

Main Characters

Lucifer- He was a student in wizardwarts district 1. He always hated Tristan since school. After graduating they just parted ways but both went to NYC. They found themselves and are enemies now.

Tristan- He always wanted to be a good wizard. He graduated school top of his class projected to be a great wizard. He moved to NYC after graduation and has been catching criminals from the wizard world since.

Ragnarok- He is a monster fro the wizard world. He is in NYC by coincidence out to destroy humanity. He can transform into human form because of how powers.

Kim- She was also a wizardwarts graduate. She is in love with Tristan and Tristan does not have a clue. She follows him to NYC because he loves him but helps him with “work”. She goes there in a mission to make Tristan fall in love with her.

Jackwick-He is another creature from the wizard world. He was a good friend of Ragnarok who went with him to NYC and destroy New York City completely and kill everyone in it. He became his villain assistant when they got to NYC.

The Wizard Earth Rules

The 10 rules for The Wizard Earth are:

  1. You can’t tell humans you are a wizard
  2. To go Back to wizard earth you need to insert a wand in the Wizard trick book
  3. Visit The Wizard Earth once a year
  4. You can’t fall in love with humans
  5. You can never kill a human (Only Hurt)
  6. Never work with human authorities
  7. Wizards are Inmortal
  8. If your superior wizard has an order follow it
  9. Your wizard children have to go to Wizardwards school before practicing real wizard tricks
  10. Disobeying wizard rules will end in death.